The Ring of Leilani eBook Annie Crawford
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The last thing fifteen-year-old Julia Dickinson expects while vacationing with her parents in Cancun is to find an ancient crown in an underwater cave, try it on. . .and be transformed into a mermaid. And not just any mermaid, but a direct descendant of the long-lost Princess Leilani and the heir to Leilani’s throne. The idea of being a queen is exciting, and the members of the merclan are overjoyed to have a leader once more. . .but Julia’s not at all sure she’s ready to give up her life as a human.
Julia’s fate hinges on a missing magic ring. Before she can become queen, she must find the ring, lost for a hundred fifty years, since the crown is useless without it. And when she learns that the combined power of crown and ring can make her human again, she’s even more motivated to search for it.
Accompanied by one of the merclan elders, Julia embarks on a perilous quest to find the ring. Along the way she blunders into a fishing net and meets Chac, a seventeen-year-old Mayan boy enamored of merfolk who promises to help her in her search. But if and when Julia does find the ring, can she also find happiness as a mermaid queen?
The Ring of Leilani eBook Annie Crawford
The basic concept, though a familiar one, is a sound premise for a good story. I wanted to like this, and it did have its moments; however, it suffers from slow pacing, too many characters, and not enough character development. After the initial change, it takes far too long for anything of interest to happen. Throughout the book, I had to force myself to keep reading. I had a minor interest in the end result, but the writing was not compelling.Unrealistic reactions are also a problem. If I had just become a mermaid, I wouldn't be worried about a science project I was supposed to present, especially not in the first few minutes.The dialogue would read much better without such things as beginning a sentence with "so" or "by the way." The main character does quite a lot of superfluous apologizing. Sorry. Sorry. Oh. Sorry. It makes her sound weak.
Dialogue attribution could be handled a lot better. The dialogue itself could use some work. Dialogue and conversation are not the same. - "Dialogue is a literary form that provides the illusion of transcribed speech to either establish character, advance the plot, or preferably, both." -- John Mavin, Simon Fraser University web page. As Stephen King put it: "Good dialogue is a delight to read; bad dialogue is deadly."
Julia is whiny and superficial. She displays no real leadership. She freaks out. She gushes. She is beside herself in happiness over being given a single jewel. She acts too surprised when told that humans are dangerous. - Shallow and petty, she is hard to take after a bit. She feels like a helpless damsel, in hysterics and distracted by attractive boys.
'"What?" Julia was bewildered.' - Don't tell us that Julia was bewildered. Let us see that for ourselves. -- "Don't tell me the moon is shining; show me the glint of light on broken glass." - Anton Chekhov
Overuse of adjectives and adverbs: "The adverb is not your friend." - Stephen King, On Writing. As William Zinsser put it: "Most adverbs are unnecessary." William Noble has a useful Writer's Digest article on this topic: "Don't use Adverbs and Adjectives to Prettify Your Prose."
Too many exclamation marks. A helpful article on this topic is: 10 Rules for Good Writing - By Elmore Leonard.
The plot, such as it is, meanders. This book could benefit by more attention to story structure, such as using three acts and/or an eight point arc. More adherence to these principles would help to generate and maintain interest.
"Lightening-fast" should be "lightning-fast." Comma splices are present. The eye rolling is unattractive and unnecessary. Back story overload. She keeps saying she isn't a mermaid while she clearly is a mermaid.
I like the idea, but not the execution. I really can't recommend it, but I might consider reading a revised version or a different work by the same author; however, if the same problems were present, I would be unlikely to finish it.
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The Ring of Leilani eBook Annie Crawford Reviews
I really liked the book! I just whish there was a series! (I wonder if there is!) I just cant believe that Julia and "Alani" were separated! Its such a mystery in the end! I recommend this book to anyone, really! I love this
It was a truly good book. I plainly love fiction. it helped me love reading
I recommend this book. Sorrel. Age 10.
I absolutely loved this book! The plot is full of surprises and the descriptions of mermaid life underwater are magical, inspiring respect for marine life. It's very well written, in a style that will appeal particularly to younger teens. I liked the fact that the ending is unexpected and leaves you wanting more. Can't wait for the sequel!
I really loved the book it's one if the best mermaid books I have ever read. ) ) ) ) ) ) ) ) ) ) ) ) ) ) ) ) ) #get the book I guarantee u will looooooooovvvvvvvvvvvvveeeeee it ) ) ) ) )
Really liked this story. I recently discover the tv series 'H2O Just Add Water on the internet and also read the Everblue and Evergreen mermaids books, so I was looking for similar books. Will definitely read the next book in this series. I read this in one day and I'm not a fast reader so that saying something!
This story was really nice. I liked it alot and i feel like it had a great plot. There was a few things i didn't like about it but overall it was still great!
Beautifully written story, no typos. This story goes smoothly, and has the perfect amount of surprise/predictability. Aside from Naked Lady On Cover, (D) it is the perfect mermaid story.
Reviewed by a Water Lover )
The basic concept, though a familiar one, is a sound premise for a good story. I wanted to like this, and it did have its moments; however, it suffers from slow pacing, too many characters, and not enough character development. After the initial change, it takes far too long for anything of interest to happen. Throughout the book, I had to force myself to keep reading. I had a minor interest in the end result, but the writing was not compelling.
Unrealistic reactions are also a problem. If I had just become a mermaid, I wouldn't be worried about a science project I was supposed to present, especially not in the first few minutes.The dialogue would read much better without such things as beginning a sentence with "so" or "by the way." The main character does quite a lot of superfluous apologizing. Sorry. Sorry. Oh. Sorry. It makes her sound weak.
Dialogue attribution could be handled a lot better. The dialogue itself could use some work. Dialogue and conversation are not the same. - "Dialogue is a literary form that provides the illusion of transcribed speech to either establish character, advance the plot, or preferably, both." -- John Mavin, Simon Fraser University web page. As Stephen King put it "Good dialogue is a delight to read; bad dialogue is deadly."
Julia is whiny and superficial. She displays no real leadership. She freaks out. She gushes. She is beside herself in happiness over being given a single jewel. She acts too surprised when told that humans are dangerous. - Shallow and petty, she is hard to take after a bit. She feels like a helpless damsel, in hysterics and distracted by attractive boys.
'"What?" Julia was bewildered.' - Don't tell us that Julia was bewildered. Let us see that for ourselves. -- "Don't tell me the moon is shining; show me the glint of light on broken glass." - Anton Chekhov
Overuse of adjectives and adverbs "The adverb is not your friend." - Stephen King, On Writing. As William Zinsser put it "Most adverbs are unnecessary." William Noble has a useful Writer's Digest article on this topic "Don't use Adverbs and Adjectives to Prettify Your Prose."
Too many exclamation marks. A helpful article on this topic is 10 Rules for Good Writing - By Elmore Leonard.
The plot, such as it is, meanders. This book could benefit by more attention to story structure, such as using three acts and/or an eight point arc. More adherence to these principles would help to generate and maintain interest.
"Lightening-fast" should be "lightning-fast." Comma splices are present. The eye rolling is unattractive and unnecessary. Back story overload. She keeps saying she isn't a mermaid while she clearly is a mermaid.
I like the idea, but not the execution. I really can't recommend it, but I might consider reading a revised version or a different work by the same author; however, if the same problems were present, I would be unlikely to finish it.
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